For more information on each of these features that affect the formality
and academic tone of writing, look at the model texts below. Text A and
B introduce the same basic ideas but the formality with which these ideas
are presented differs markedly. Read text A and text B, thinking about
the difference in academic tone between the two texts.
Click on the links to the formal text and the informal text below. The
key devices and features that combine to create the tone of each text
are listed and more information on their relationship to academic writing
|Text A - FORMAL TEXT
||Text B - INFORMAL TEXT
|The inequity in the distribution of wealth in Australia
is yet another indicator of Australia's lack of egalitarianism.
In 1995, 20% of the Australian population owned 72.2% of Australia's
wealth with the top 50% owning 92.1% (Raskall, 1998: 287). Such
a significant skew in the distribution of wealth indicates that,
at least in terms of economics, there is an established class system
in Australia. McGregor (1988) argues that Australian society can
be categorised into three levels: the Upper, Middle and Working
classes. In addition, it has been shown that most Australians continue
to remain in the class into which they were born (McGregor, 1988:
156) despite arguments about the ease of social mobility in Australian
society (Fitzpatrick, 1994). The issue of class and its inherent
inequity, however, is further compounded by factors such as race
and gender within and across these class divisions.
||Because only a few people have most of the money and power in
Australia, I conclude that it is not an equal society. Society has
an Upper, Middle and Lower class and I think that most people when
they are born into one class, end up staying in that class for their
whole lives. When all three classes are looked at more closely,
other things such as the differences between the sexes and people's
racial backgrounds also add to the unequal nature of Australian
|The relative disadvantage of women with regard to
their earnings and levels of asset ownership indicates that within
classes there is further economic inequity based on gender...
||Women earn less than men and own less than men. Why is this so?
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