Avoiding emotive words in academic writing

Example text:

Apparently the patient who died of cancer while having her special food and drink needs ignored, died more uncomfortably than was necessary and died in an undignified way. It's a real shame that something as simple as a diet was not taken account of by nurses, thus causing unnecessary pain to the patient. It probably caused even more pain to the patient's family and friends having to see their loved one die like that. How would we feel if we saw our own relative go through that experience?

The red text signifies the use of emotive language. It adds poignant description to the facts and so helps to create the extremely subjective tone of this text. This type of language plays a role in persuading the reader toward the writer's point of view.

Emotive words should be avoided in academic writing because they make a piece of writing sound subjective rather than objective. Although persuasive, these words do not help to argue your case in formal writing as they appeal to emotions rather than helping to create a reasonable and justified conclusion, based on the evidence.