Feedback: Making descriptions specific

There were several ways to rework the sentence so that it contained a more specific description than the original sentence. Remember, the description needs to be specific and exact about the issue you are referring to.

An appropriately controlled method of data collection was employed by the cultural diversity working party to investigate the impact of cultural diversity in the classroom.

A randomly sampled method of data collection was employed by the cultural diversity working party to investigate the impact of cultural diversity in the classroom.